Band 9 Sample Essay for IELTS Writing Task 2 Topic: Nature

IELTS Writing Task 2 Topic:

Some people believe that one’s character is fixed by nature. Others believe it is accumulated during the growth process. What is your opinion?

INTRODUCTION

Each and every person is unique (=special, not the same as anyone else). There has never been, and never will be, another person like you or me again. In this essay, I will show that to answer this question, we have to distinguish (to recognize the differences between things) between physical and other characteristics. (41 words)

BODY

In the first place, we have to know that our genes, which we inherit (to receive money or property from someone who has died) from our parents, determine (=find out) our physical characteristics. Excluding cosmetic surgery, there is no way that we can change these features. Many people, especially women, find it difficult to accept this fact. For example, some women spend infinite ( countless)  amounts of time, money, and effort in an attempt to change their physical features, and even more so as soon as they start to age (become older). Many of us, however, simply accept a peculiar (unusual) feature like a large nose, short legs, and so on and carry on with our lives.

Our ethical and social character, however, can be changed during the growth process. We usually refer to it as “growing up” or “becoming mature.” For instance, as we grow older we learn to adapt to (=adjust to) our circumstances, and the people we have to live and work with. This is in contrast to (=different from ) a baby, who has not learned to consider others and is only worried (concerned) about its own needs. Some people never develop their character and remain selfish (egocentric) human beings all their lives. (182 words)

CONCLUSION

In conclusion, I have looked at physical features and other characteristics and have jumped to (reached) the conclusion that the first one (former) cannot be changed, while the last (latter) is usually changed during the maturation process. (33 words)
(Total words: 256)